First Senior Shoot: Critique! Critique! Critique! Please!!

Great shot, Rodger! Great subject and composition. Nice work in making the eyes such a strong part of the photo. I like the leading lines and geometric shapes. The contrast of textures between the tree, subject, and blurry background and bokeh are nice. The play between light and shadow is great. I like the wind-swept hair. I like the green plant for anchoring the bottom of the frame, but I don't think the flowers add much to the photo. On the whole a very good portrait.


I dislike the skin tone. I wonder if reduced saturation and warmer white balance would look better, although strong saturation is a popular look for some customers. Crushed blacks are popular for increasing global contrast, but I would prefer to see a lot more detail and color in the sweater. It looks like the red channel blew out on her arms/hands.


Good job!

Agreed on the power lines in the shot and it doesn't seem like its' following the "3rds rule" because of the powerlines :)



Besides that great shot.. and I think for sure it's the fake-up (sorry it's what I call make-up :)) that's making it look like the face is totally different skin tone to the arms.

Thankyou for all the kind comments. And especially the critiques.


I uploaded the second edit and left the 1st one up for side by side. Here is the link to the2nd edit.


I went back and tried my best to take out the power lines. As well as try to match the skin tones better. I used the hue/saturation layer to bring the saturation down, and then used layer masks and the color balance layer to make the adjustments. I don't know the technicalities of the toning issues, but could it be that there was more light on her left arm? It kind of looks like a hotspot to me from the sun. I could be wrong though.


As for the flowers at the bottom, I will remove those when we do the actual shoot.


Again, Thank you all so much for your input!


-Rodger

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Originally Posted by Rodger

I uploaded the second edit and left the 1st one up for side by side

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Sorry, the "guest pass" or whatever that Flickr generates must only be good for the 2nd photo. First photo should still be up at the first post though.


I think I will use the 2nd edit for promo stuff etc. I think I like it more. You don't have to critique any longer if you don't want, but if you have a comment, don't hesitate.


Again, thanks all! :)


-Rodger

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Rodger

I uploaded the second edit and left the 1st one up for side by side

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Sorry, the "guest pass" or whatever that Flickr generates must only be good for the 2nd photo. First photo should still be up at the first post though.


I think I will use the 2nd edit for promo stuff etc. I think I like it more. You don't have to critique any longer if you don't want, but if you have a comment, don't hesitate.


Again, thanks all! :)


-Rodger