"Bow-ties are cool." Indeed. The fence is a bit distracting, I don't know if it's because the board goes through her head or because it's white and is a dominate bright object in the frame or what. BUT it's not so distracting that it makes it a bad photo to me. I really like it. You did the most important thing and that was to get genuine expressions out of your subjects. I dig it. Keep that kind of interaction with your clients up and you'll keep getting paid work.